So here's the second section of "Keeping Susie Whole." The editing is going poorly. I'm happy with he first half to three-quarters of the story, but something seems to go wrong toward the end.
Perhaps it's because I never conceived of this being as long as it has become. Originally it struck my as a 2,000-word piece. It's more than 5,000 words. That's probably too long, but I like the direction it's gone in, it's just the voice and the tone that have sort of strayed on me in the last 1,000 words.
But that's what editing is for right? Anyway, here's some stuff more stuff from he beginning:
Draft excerpt removed due to submission
Chuck Palahniuk's " Zombie " mixes teenage lobotomies and airport crowds to revel in the zombie-like compulsions that inexplic...
What the hell is this? Does anyone else hate the colors? What should I be writing about in the Daily Brain Dump? I started this whole thing...
This beachy surf-guitar track was recorded with a Slick SL60 played through Izoptope Trash 2 with a lot of chorus and reverb--of course. ...
My lovely wife.